Tuesday, October 4, 2016

original paper 2 paragraph

We go about our day. We do things for ourselves, we better ourselves and we learn and gain knowledge and experience. We also care for others and raise families and live for others. This is a small fundamental truth to humans. It is that we are all individuals with motives and dreams and desires and goals, and yet the connection we have to one another as human to human is inexplicably powerful. The interactions we share we disasters occur are not taught, but they are present. It is through these extremes that we witness how close we are to one another despite our unique individuality. In this regard, there is such a thing as a shared, collective intelligence among the people that tethers these people to each other. Davidson, Johnson and Lethem's accounts of crowdsourcing, organized complexity and plagiarism all share the common theme of explaining a different aspect of "collective intelligence" and the unique position it has in society and the way it affects humans as a group, as a team and as connected beings.

As a basis, it was suggested that I clean up a few grammatical errors and use the authors' full names with an introduction of their works, assuming the reader does not know what or who they are.

1 comment:

  1. You were to revise body paragraphs, not introductions! Also, where's the original? I'd like to hear more about what the distinctions are between plagiarism, crowdsourcing, and organized complexity: you should unfold these in sequence in order to illustrate connections, rather than listing them all at once.

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